more updates to "upload" doc

diff --git a/yarrg/web/upload b/yarrg/web/upload
index aa40571fd5b884d4e1ca7d437119f20ee27f8236..2714dcd8aa4998a71135e0cb561e2cee57dae3c9 100755 (executable)
--- a/yarrg/web/upload
+++ b/yarrg/web/upload
@@ -74,13 +74,12 @@ YPP client.  Then press "Upload" in the JPCTB window.
 <p>
 
 The JPCTB integration is done via fully supported Java Accessibility
-interfaces and without modifying the Puzzle Pirates client, and should
-not disturb the normal running of Puzzle Pirates.  However, please
-make sure that if your YPP client misbehaves at all, you try running
-it in the vanilla way (without JPCTB integration) before asking for
-help.  In particular, if the JPCTB startup does not work, but the
-ordinary Puzzle Pirates startup does, report the problem to us, not to
-Three Rings.
+interfaces, and should not disturb the normal running of Puzzle
+Pirates.  However, please make sure that if your YPP client misbehaves
+at all, you try starting it in the vanilla way (without JPCTB
+integration) before asking for help.  In particular, if the JPCTB
+startup does not work, but the ordinary Puzzle Pirates startup does,
+report the problem to us, not to Three Rings.
 
 <h3>Installing and running on Linux</h3>
 
@@ -125,11 +124,12 @@ databases.
 <p>
 
 YARRG JPCTB uses the Java Accessibility API, which is a part of the
-Java platform.  It's an interface provided for making applications
-available to users with disabilities, for example for hooking in
-screen readers.  This approach was helpfully suggested by a Ringer in
-the forums (to another developer of a third-party tool, wanting help
-getting information out of Duty Reports).
+Java platform.  It's an facility in Java, available for all Java
+programs, intended to help make applications available to users with
+disabilities; for example, it permits hooking in screen readers.  The
+use of the Java Accessibility API was helpfully suggested by a Ringer
+in the forums (to another developer of a third-party tool, wanting
+help getting information out of Duty Reports).
 
 <p>
 
@@ -155,7 +155,8 @@ Thanks to Burninator for writing the core of the JPCTB client.  Ian
 Jackson and Owen Dunn adapted it to improve the installation setup (in
 particular, to more completely avoid modifying the YPP client's
 startup files, which Three Rings unsurprisingly objected to).  Owen
-Dunn added support for uploading to YARRG and a Windows installer.
+Dunn added support for uploading to YARRG, updated the build system,
+and wrote a Windows installer.
 
 <p>